Home, by Donna McIntosh – A Gay Guy/Straight Girl Co-review

Gay Guy/Straight Girl Co-Review
Gay Guy/Straight Girl Co-Review

Lisa’s Rating: 2.5 Stars
OJ’s Rating: 3.0 Stars
Lisa’s Review: Attention Is Arbitrary

BLURB

Every detective has one criminal he wants to bring to justice–the one who skates around the edges of the underground world, but always has an alibi and can’t be pinned down for a single crime. For LAPD Detective Sean Riker, that criminal is Mitchell Yates. Riker thinks he finally has Yates and decides to pull him in for questioning. Instead, Yates saves Sean’s life when he takes a bullet to the shoulder. The shooting hasn’t stopped and escape routes are blocked. Yates does the only thing he can. Transports Riker to his HOME–a manmade satellite orbiting Earth. Now Riker faces a choice–Remain with the LAPD…or join the Keepers’ mission.

CO-REVIEW

OJ

This book really called out to me. I mean, what’s not to like. Cops. Badass men. Space stations. Possessive exes. Hell, it’s a gay geek’s wet dream come true, right? The short answer: Yes. The longer answer: keep reading.

LISA

I loved the cover.
I loved the premise.
I loved the first chapter.
But…

THE CHARACTERS

OJ

Mitchell ‘Yana’ Yates:

Never in his forty-three years had he met someone who unsettled him so, and he hated himself for letting Yates get to him. He didn’t rattle easily, but there was something about this Mitchell Yates, with his six-foot figure, perfect teeth, emerald green eyes framed with long, thick eyelashes, and dark hair that tried to curl no matter how much he slicked it back.

Detective Sean Hennessey:

Hot, hunky, blond, furry Sean Hennessey has lived the life of a lonely cop, not wanting to come out and experience life, living a lonely existence, until he meets up with Mitchell Yates. He suspects Yates is deeply involved in nefarious activities, and yet there’s something more that calls to Sean, something he doesn’t begin to realize until he’s embroiled in the fantastical happenings after Yates saves his life.

LISA

Detective Sean Hennessey

Rugged, determined police detective, Sean Hennessey is about to discover a whole new world and have his life turned upside down. Sean’s looks aren’t described until the last fifteen percent of the book, so I had a very hard time creating a mental image of him.

Mitchell Yates (Yana)

Cool, calm, collected, Yana, is nothing that Sean thinks he is.

THE STORY

OJ

This is a good, solid science fiction premise: the LAPD detective following a strange character that seems to be present at various crime scenes, always with a perfect alibi that he feels deep down is BS. The sexy, alluring character that calls to the lonely detective and the truth behind it all. Yate/Yana is part of the Peace Keepers, a secret space faring, peace keeping people that have parked their space stations, at least some of them, around Earth – trying to keep Earth from making a mess of itself. Yates/Yana is drawn to the hot Earth detective and yet Yana has a former fling, Jimmy, that refuses to acknowledge that his and Yana’s moment was just that, a fling, and instead insists on stalking Yana and generally making nuisance of himself. Add in the standard space travel and medical wonders of the future/alien civilizations and you have the ingredients for a solid science fiction MM book.

LISA

This is where I was thrown for a loop. I was expecting a story that I didn’t get. I was so excited to read about a good guy chasing a bad guy around the galaxy and ultimately falling in love. Instead what this book was about was an earth guy discovering a super-secret protection agency stationed in near space. Much of the book is about Sean settling into life on the space station and coming to terms with leaving Earth permanently. Eventually the two mc’s do get to seek adventure in the stars, but it’s all very cordial and too perfect with rather cliche sci-fi adventure tropes. I was left feeling disappointed.

The first 40 percent of the book is all relationship development and world building. Then a few missions ensue, but everything is too convenient, too perfect.

At one point Sean has been training for a year for his first mission, he’s ready to go, but he isn’t briefed. Unlikely. He steps aboard the transport ship to take himself and Yana on their mission and it’s all brand new to Sean. Really? After a year of training? It’s just too unbelievable.

The story ends with Sean writing in a previously unforeseen diary to sum things up in a profound way. Even that just didn’t fit for me. Sean isn’t really a profound, diary writing kind of guy. Yana maybe, but not Sean.

THE WRITING

OJ

The writing is good. It flows well, no hiccups, with good editing and follow through, it just doesn’t deliver solidly in the science fiction genre. I’m left asking who are the Peace Keepers? Where did they come from? What is the end game here? What happens to Jimmy? Where do they go from here?

The MM Romance angle is good, not bad, and the sex scenes are also good, not bad, there’s just a certain science fiction spark that’s missing – and I’m a huge science fiction guy. It’s all here, it just needs to be connected and lit up so it goes *kaboom*. Give me more background, give me more geekiness, give me more.

Don’t get me wrong, please. It’s enjoyable, it’s well written, I just want some more delivery.

LISA

I found the writing sophomoric and amateurish. I believe (and I may be mistaken) that this was written as a series of shorts and brought together to create a novel. If that is true it may explain the disjointed feel to the book.

Ultimately there was a lack of connection with plot, writing, and characters throughout the story.

THE THREE QUESTIONS

For Lisa

1) What did you think of the sex scenes?
2) Was it too idyllic?
3) Is there someone you’d like to hear more about?

For OJ

1) Book two???
2) How did you feel about the godzilla-like reptile adventure?
3) Did you, like me, enjoy the concept of Home? The facility.

THE DISCLAIMER

I would like to thank Donna McIntosh and Wayward Ink Publishing for providing OJ He Say! with a copy in exchange for my honest review.

THE AUTHOR

DONNA McINTOSH was born in Elmira, New York, grew up in Phoenix, Arizona, married a Texan and has lived all over Texas for the last thirty-plus years. Donna has four children, ran a Day Care Center for many years and has written fan fiction since she was thirteen.

Donna loves long walks so her mind can ramble. She loves reading and her tastes run from Historical novels, to Sci-Fi, Westerns, Classics, all the way to WWII and biographies. In short, anything that catches her eye.

Donna loves total quiet, very little TV, occasional movies, wildlife, beaches, birds, cats, newborn babies, flowers, and great big smiles. Oh, and hugs!

She hates flying, total darkness, people who talk endlessly about themselves, intolerance, and bigotry.

Donna’s biggest asset? Her wild and endless imagination.

Her biggest flaw? She’s a Libran and simply cannot make a decision!

DONNA McINTOSH can be found at: http://donnamcintosh.weebly.com/

Copyright © 2016 by Donna McIntosh
Cover Art by: Adrian Rafail

Wayward Ink Publishing
Unit 1, No. 8 Union Street
Tighes Hill, NSW, 2297, Australia.
http://www.waywardinkpublishing.com
eBook ISBN: 978-1-925222-85-2

  • My answers –

    1) What did you think of the sex scenes?
    I actually kind of liked most of the sex scenes. They were a bit more fun than the rest of the story. I especially liked, “YES!! Don’t stop! Pleeeeeaase. Uh.” Heehee 😀

    2) Was it too idyllic?
    Yes. Besides not being the book described, IMO, everything was just too easy. The conflict was totally missing. And then the end had a “perfect” element stuffed in to make things “complete”. Ugh, just unrealistic.

    3) Is there someone you’d like to hear more about?
    Noel was a bit intriguing, but we don’t know anything about his history. He had personality though. But to be honest, I just didn’t click with any of the characters.

    As I said, I wanted to love this book. It just didn’t turn out that way, sadly.